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 Posted: Tue Mar 04, 2008 11:08 pm Post subject: Bag of Green Grapes |
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Bag of Green Grapes
Ploo!
number.
forty two two
PLU
#4022
It was written on a bag of green grapes and that's how I read it. I thought it sounded cool, so I hath made it into a poem! Some might call it plaigiarism, or even just stupid. But I think it's funny. Have some humor, it's a silly poem! Enjoy! 
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| Posted: Tue Mar 04, 2008 11:13 pm Post subject: |
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hahahaha!!
that is an amazing poem |
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| Posted: Wed Mar 05, 2008 1:09 am Post subject: |
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Loved it!
Pretty funny you are my friend!
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| Posted: Wed Mar 05, 2008 2:10 am Post subject: |
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Lol, wow., That was pretty funny. Interesting inspiraation, a bag of grapes. I liked it..
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| Posted: Wed Mar 05, 2008 2:30 am Post subject: |
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Hmm... you have a good idea here, but I feel that it's lacking proper imagery and metaphor. I mean, I didn't feel anything after reading this.
*gigglesnort*
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| Posted: Wed Mar 05, 2008 8:00 am Post subject: |
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| Interesting... *smiles and backs away* |
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| Posted: Wed Mar 05, 2008 2:01 pm Post subject: |
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Hm, it's interesting how you found that.
Obviously you have a lot of time on your hands.
[Giggled]
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| Posted: Wed Mar 05, 2008 9:04 pm Post subject: |
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A quite original poem. I loved the rhythm and the language.
*snork*
Great job here. Inspiration comes in the most unlikely places, no?
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| Posted: Wed Mar 05, 2008 9:16 pm Post subject: |
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^_^
I think "ploo" is my favorite part. |
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| Posted: Wed Mar 05, 2008 9:32 pm Post subject: |
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Funny how so many things around us are humorous without trying to be. The poem was quaint. I think if you really wanted to make this a good poem and not just a funny little diddy you should add a bit more of what you did after you read that.
And also, what in the Sam heck is Ploo? |
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| Posted: Wed Mar 05, 2008 10:28 pm Post subject: |
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hahaha:) "Plu!"
I might just have to adopt your way of finding poems, yo:) bags of food... interesting
*giggle*
pretty sweet, yoyo *goldstar* |
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| Posted: Thu Mar 06, 2008 1:39 am Post subject: |
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 This made me giggle a lot. It's fun to say "Ploo!" xD |
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| Posted: Fri Mar 07, 2008 12:45 pm Post subject: |
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At first I didn't get it. It taked a while fo rme to get things like this, or eveyrhting. Anyway back to your poem:
Very funny. I liked to say it over and over. Like L_A said, weird inspiratiopn. YOu have quite an imagination.
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