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myfreindsavamp
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Posted: Mon Jul 21, 2008 1:52 pm Post subject: A New Light on a Distant Shot |
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myfreindsavamp
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Posted: Thu Jul 24, 2008 2:56 pm Post subject: |
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Kyte
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Posted: Sat Jul 26, 2008 1:34 am Post subject: |
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| It's real good. No mistakes that I can see, and you conveyed the characters' feelings well. |
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myfreindsavamp
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myfreindsavamp
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Posted: Tue Sep 09, 2008 11:38 am Post subject: |
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myfreindsavamp
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Posted: Mon Sep 29, 2008 11:47 am Post subject: |
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myfreindsavamp
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Posted: Sat Oct 25, 2008 7:36 pm Post subject: |
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sibyis
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Posted: Mon Oct 27, 2008 12:36 pm Post subject: |
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| From what I can read here, your story seems to have a great idea. It's unique, and the characters seem dynamic and able to convey feelings well in a refreshing manner. Your characters are not at all lifeless dolls. It's nice. |
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righting
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Age: 15 Joined: 26 Oct 2008 Posts: 23 Reviews: 0
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Posted: Wed Oct 29, 2008 12:03 am Post subject: |
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| It was a good read... cool. |
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myfreindsavamp
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