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A New Light on a Distant Shot

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PostPosted: Mon Jul 21, 2008 1:52 pm    Post subject: A New Light on a Distant Shot Reply with quote

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PostPosted: Thu Jul 24, 2008 2:56 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

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PostPosted: Sat Jul 26, 2008 1:34 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

It's real good. No mistakes that I can see, and you conveyed the characters' feelings well.

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PostPosted: Mon Sep 29, 2008 11:47 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

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PostPosted: Sat Oct 25, 2008 7:36 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

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PostPosted: Mon Oct 27, 2008 12:36 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

From what I can read here, your story seems to have a great idea. It's unique, and the characters seem dynamic and able to convey feelings well in a refreshing manner. Your characters are not at all lifeless dolls. It's nice.
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PostPosted: Wed Oct 29, 2008 12:03 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

It was a good read... cool.

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PostPosted: Wed Oct 29, 2008 10:56 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Disapearing for the time being.

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