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PostPosted: Mon Jul 07, 2008 8:20 am    Post subject: Reply with quote
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Review please. It's a fanfic, but I just need grammar mostly and anything else you can suggest.

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PostPosted: Wed Aug 06, 2008 5:55 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
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It's a revised version, and I tried my best to incorporate all that you said, but I would love for you to take another look.

Make sure you let me know when I can return the favor!

Thanks so much, Heather. XD

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PostPosted: Thu Aug 07, 2008 12:16 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
Hey Kitty Smile

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic34111.html

Please and thanks

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PostPosted: Sun Aug 10, 2008 5:48 am    Post subject: Reply with quote
Hey Heather!!!

A Thank You Note to Donny could use some help and pointers. Thanks.

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PostPosted: Tue Aug 12, 2008 1:22 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
Hey everyone! My list is nearing empty again and I was wondering if anyone has a sequence of chapters they'd like me to look at? Something to keep me busy for the next two weeks.

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PostPosted: Wed Aug 13, 2008 11:12 am    Post subject: Reply with quote
I lubses you Saber.

Mind checking this out? http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic34368.html

Dramatic poetry, titled "Fortuitous Graves"

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*Hearts* Le Penguin.

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PostPosted: Sat Aug 16, 2008 5:57 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
Hey Kitty!

I was wondering if you wouldn't mind taking a look at this short story I posted? It's rated R, so please don't feel obliged to review it if you're against reading. It's in my sig if you wanted to take a look.

Thanks!

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PostPosted: Mon Aug 18, 2008 5:32 am    Post subject: Reply with quote
Hey Kitty! This is bizarre, but it needs reviews. Please help? ^^

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/post412900.html?sid=971f0afc03d6841c6f9cb51e62162a49#412900

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PostPosted: Sat Aug 23, 2008 1:38 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
The Loser needs your help!

Wow, I've asked you for so many reviews over time, if there's anything you'd like me to take a look at, please tell me, okay?

Thank you!

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PostPosted: Wed Aug 27, 2008 9:24 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
We're thinking about you

Hey Heather! Just wanted you to see this poem... and murder it to pieces. Thanks.

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PostPosted: Thu Aug 28, 2008 3:00 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
Sure thing, Gadi.

Okay, I'm going on holiday tomorrow so any requests after this post won't be completed until I return in a weeks time but feel free to post a few anyway,

Heather xx

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PostPosted: Mon Sep 15, 2008 12:38 am    Post subject: Reply with quote
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic35609.html
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic35610.html

If you could rip this to pieces, I would greatly appreciate it.

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PostPosted: Mon Sep 15, 2008 1:44 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
Sure thing.

Also, just leaving myself a reminder to critique the latest chapters of Needles and Roses and Gypsy.

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PostPosted: Mon Sep 15, 2008 10:17 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
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could you pls review this for me? thx ^^

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PostPosted: Thu Sep 18, 2008 10:50 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
Hello darling Smile

Pretty please with sugar on top?

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic36165.html

Thanks mucho!

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