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 Posted: Thu Sep 25, 2008 2:03 am Post subject: Entangled in... hair? |
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Another production thanks to the looking through of beauty magazines. ;3
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| Posted: Fri Sep 26, 2008 12:25 am Post subject: |
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Uh... her sideburn is kind of creepy.
What I like most abotu this is her eye - it sticks out the most. But since this is all about her hair, then that's not good. Add way more detail to the strands of her hair. Make it more dramatic, attention-grabbing! Darken it, keep some areas light. It's all about contrast.
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| Posted: Fri Sep 26, 2008 8:37 pm Post subject: |
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Hiya artistpersona
Alright I'll start with the good about it,
The eye is very detailed,
you have actually cared about the eyebrow instead of drawing a caterpiller like most of the gcse art students do. Not me tho I am a gcse art student.
Bad about it,
her sideburn is very detailed but the rest of her hair very non detailed and it is just a few lines,
try and use more lines in your hair to add more hair detail.
her nose needs more shadeing near the nosetuls.
Looks like she has goofy teeth, you need to show more of her bottom teeth,
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| Posted: Mon Sep 29, 2008 6:41 pm Post subject: |
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Well this is not too bad. How long have you been drawing? The only things you need to be careful of are nose shape/size, eye shape/size/location. Her forehead seems to small, since her eyes are a little bit too up. They should be either right about the ears, or starting at the higher top of them.
the nose is too long. It should start somewhere a little bit above the mouth, and not past the eyes. It will look better that way. When you draw the main nose (nostrils ect.) you should do some practice ones. Here are a few examples....
http://vincaminor.deviantart.com/art/Noses-30840448
http://dotchan.deviantart.com/art/Noses-54437369
See there are lots of ways to do a nose, so find the one best for you ^_^
Also is you want some eye examples that show correct placement and shape here are some. Just examples.
http://scarlingragdoll666.deviantart.com/art/The-eyes-have-it-59171173
http://frozennova.deviantart.com/art/Eyes-Study-13726221
Of course nothing can be done without time,patients and lots of PRACTICE! So do not give up not matter what! I see lots of potential in your drawing. ^_^ |
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| Posted: Wed Oct 01, 2008 2:48 am Post subject: |
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Really nice hair! The nose... I think you should make less lines and more shading, the mouth is really rough for my taste, and the eye is way to small for the proportions of the face... but the light on the pupil is real good, the eyebrow and ear is quite good, but again... the eyebrow is way to small.
I hope you take this for your art to be better and better! Beacuse I'm on the same path! |
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| Posted: Mon Oct 06, 2008 12:14 am Post subject: |
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| Uh... her sideburn is kind of creepy. |
Lmao! xD
I've been drawing on a more professional scale for about... three years, Maki-Chan. And thanks for the links. 
Thank you to everyone who posted, your reviews are very helpful to me. |
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| For three years, not bad at all. ^_^ Do your best, and keep on improving. Don't be afraid to do something you haven't done before, like drawing in a new style. In fact it might help you improve a lot. Good luck ^_^ |
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