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Avens Dolor
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 Posted: Sun Jul 20, 2008 6:03 pm Post subject: Red Line Reviews |
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Hello all!
I love reviewing, but I when I scan the forums I'm always terrified that I'll give a tough critique to someone who isn't quite ready for it.
When I give someone an edit, I look at their work as I would look at my own. I'm also a perfectionist. And have a dry sense of humor. These things don't always mix well.
But for those who want a tough, deep critique, I'm ready and willing!
I will read just about anything, but I give priority to (in this order):
+ Fantasy
+ Literary-esque Fiction
+ Action/Adventure
I will review poetry if you're really desperate, but it's not my best area.
For examples of my reviews, see my previous crits:
Invisible Man (Prologue)
Shadowplay (Excerpt)
The Protectors of Gaia
I don't ask for much in return. Since I don't post my own work online, point donations, though much appreciated, are not entirely necessary. It would be nice of you to check out my blog and leave a comment, though!
So. Any takers?
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Jamie_rocks
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| Posted: Tue Jul 22, 2008 1:16 am Post subject: |
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Ooh, I'm the first one! I just posted this, and I'm looking for a harsh critique. (It's supernaural though, I hope you don't mind). Especially I want to know if my dialog is realistic and not choppy.
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic33373.html
P.S. Sorry, it's kind of long. |
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Avens Dolor
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| Posted: Tue Jul 22, 2008 11:08 am Post subject: |
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Hi Jamie!
Supernatural is always fun! I'll get right on it. I should finish some time this evening.
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Avens Dolor
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| Posted: Wed Jul 23, 2008 11:50 pm Post subject: |
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http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic29564.html
If you could do all of this, I'd really like it. And please, be as harsh and possible.  Scroll down until you get to the Gandhi quote on the bit called Drych-ddelwedd and carry on from there. |
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| Posted: Fri Jul 25, 2008 10:07 pm Post subject: |
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May I get a critique on this piece, please?
Thanatos |
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Avens Dolor
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| Posted: Tue Jul 29, 2008 2:27 am Post subject: |
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My mailbox flipped out and I didn't even realize that these requests were here! I'll get to them first thing tomorrow morning!
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| Posted: Wed Aug 06, 2008 5:48 pm Post subject: |
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An extremely edited version: Out of Focus
Be harsh?
Thanks so much! Let me know when I can return the favor.
~JFW1415 |
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| Posted: Fri Aug 08, 2008 11:53 pm Post subject: |
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I'll be getting right on to Out of Focus (likely will work on it tomorrow evening) and I've done everything up to that point.
Done!
I'm all caught up now. Just a note--I reserve the right to take up to a week before I post any review under normal circumstances. There are times when it may be longer (I will let you know if this is the case), and often it'll be a much shorter wait than that, but it's best that I do a critique when I feel up to it and am not feeling rushed. More fun for me that way, and more fair to you authors!
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| Posted: Sun Aug 10, 2008 7:24 am Post subject: |
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I'm back. The review on my first piece was awesome. Can you help be out again? Rip it to shreds please.
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic31712.html |
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I'd be delighted to! Unfortunately, my life is painfully busy right now, so I won't be able to get to it until Sunday night (when I'll be brought to a standstill by waiting in an airport all night). But I'm looking forward to it!
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| Posted: Sat Aug 23, 2008 7:58 pm Post subject: |
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All There Is
Let's see how much you kill something that isn't as edited as my previous story. xD
Thanks so much!
~JFW1415 |
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| Posted: Sat Aug 23, 2008 8:21 pm Post subject: |
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I would love a rip-to-shreds review.
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/post415975.html
Action/Adventure/Sci-fi novel chapter. There are two chapters before it, but this could stand alone if you're busy or feeling too lazy to check out the others. |
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Avens Dolor
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| Posted: Thu Aug 28, 2008 5:19 am Post subject: |
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Will get on these soon! School just started today and the RNC is in St Paul so things are craaaazy.
Bear with me, please!
Done!
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