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Trident
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 Posted: Wed Aug 27, 2008 2:14 am Post subject: Trident's "Poke-some-holes-in-your-piece" Shop |
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Feel free to leave a piece for me to poke some holes in. If you can handle the power of the trident, then I'll be happy to take a look.
Please feel free to explain any specifics of which you would like me to pay attention. I am a grammar savant and have a pretty good grasp on sentence structure and overall content. I have less experience with poetry, but will still have a look. Poetic conventions are probably my biggest weakness.
I do not require you to review any of my work, but if you'd like to return the favor, that would be great!
So prepare for a well thought-out critique. Beware to all who are seasick! |
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scasha
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| Posted: Wed Aug 27, 2008 12:14 pm Post subject: |
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Hey Trident!
I just put up a mystery called Murder She Drew and I was wondering if you could take a look at it. Things to look out for:
1) Were you suprised by the murderer
2) Did it all make sense?
3) Did the plot work well?
4) Any line edits you have.
Thanks so much! |
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| Posted: Wed Aug 27, 2008 12:48 pm Post subject: |
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Hi! If you could shred Scavenger for me, I'd be really grateful. If you can't do a line by line of each chapter, then an overall would be just as nice. 
If I could have specifics on the characters, whether there's anything confusing or not explained very well, whether the M/C's background is clear or confusing or whatever.
Thanks!
Oh, and you have to scroll about halfway down the page to the get to where it properly starts. The first chapter is called "Drych-ddelwedd" and begins with a Gandhi quote. |
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| Posted: Wed Aug 27, 2008 6:05 pm Post subject: |
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The Voices are Many would like a stab. ^_^
I would love just any overall impressions, and any advice or criticism you have. 
Thank you!
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| Posted: Wed Aug 27, 2008 9:20 pm Post subject: |
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Hey Tri! Here's what I'd like a crit on...
As Elaine Lights A Cigarette
It was sort of an experiment? I don't have any specific questions, really... |
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I would love for you to completely rip apart my story Forget Myself. Focussing on how it's written rather than the plot itself, but, any suggestions you could make would be appreciated! Thank you!
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic35278.html |
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I'd be grateful if you could look at my action/adventure piece, Future Final. It's only the first part of the first chapter, but I want to make it perfect before I write anymore.
I wouldn't mind if you give me some advice about sentence structure in it, as things have been pointed out that could be improved, but I'm finding it difficult.
Any other help is welcome. |
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