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101 Reasons
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yukidizon
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 Posted: Sat Oct 11, 2008 8:44 am Post subject: 101 Reasons |
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The dreamy eyes
That hold much meaning
In their depths
Capture me with one gaze
The timeless smile
That shines across your face
Is too powerful
Irresistible
That voice of yours
So gentle and sweet
Holds my heart
In it's harmonious grip
Those little antics you do
Your one-in-a-million personality
The secrets you hold within
All contribute to just who you are
With all these reasons
And so much more
Must you still ask
Why I love you?
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&& Why do I cry tears when I remember
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| Posted: Mon Oct 13, 2008 12:43 am Post subject: |
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| Okay....it was interesting. Why is the title called 101 reasons? Have you ever seen the movie "10 Things I Hate About You"? I was expecting it to be more like Kat's poem. Other than that it was very good. It could use some more editing to make it a little bit more eye catching, but I didn't really find any major problems with it. Keep working on it! |
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| Posted: Sat Oct 18, 2008 8:02 am Post subject: Review |
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The dreamy eyes,
that hold much meaning
in their depths.
Capture me with one gaze.
The timeless smile
that shines across your face.
Is too powerful,
irresistible.
That voice of yours,
so gentle and sweet,
holds my heart,
in it's harmonious grip.
Those little antics you do.
Your one-in-a-million personality.
The secrets you hold within.
All contribute to just who you are.
With all these reasons
and so much more.
Must you still ask,
Why I love you?
Wow, this is so awesome, you can feel the emotions, it is very good. There were a few grammar errors that I corrected, and the title was a little odd, just so you know. Keep up the good work. |
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Rodhead
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| Posted: Tue Oct 21, 2008 5:41 pm Post subject: |
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Hey there
I liked this poem, but why is it called 101 reasons?
I thought it was going to be much longer.
And there was grammatical errors, but other than that i liked it, it was free flowing.
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