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Fri Apr 20, 2007 12:10 am
Bananasaurus says...



I stands there under my
weeping shower head feeling
empathy while its thousand tears
from its thousand ducts slave
once a day (or twice when I got hockey)
to wash away the filth i got into the last few hours.
Then I leaves him up there, sitting lonely,
til i wanna use him again.

And lookin at the beads falling off
my porcelain etched skin i know it ain’t him bein used.
So I get a little jealous thinking
I wish I had someone to cry on, too.
  





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Fri Apr 20, 2007 1:54 am
Casey has Faded says...



very interesting style. I'm not sure what is a typo and what's not. But I like it. I'm not sure how many people would, though. so just be careful.
"Poetry is not an opinion expressed; it is a song that rises from a bleeding wound or a smiling mouth." -Kahlil Gibran
  





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Sat Apr 21, 2007 12:25 am
Bananasaurus says...



No typos, incase anyone's wondering.
  








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