“Why would anyone want to kill me? I haven’t done anything to anyone, other than knock out a few drunks here and there."
Salven left the busy tavern he'd been raised in in search of answers- and ended up with an entire kingdom after him for reasons that seem determined to avoid him.
Shunned and alone, elvin Kithkanan lives for roaming the lands, shadowed by his past.
Though the odds are not in their favor, the strangest of people step forward to help- from an oddly-behaved set of former knights and a swordsmith, an abrupt herbalist with a feeling for the future, and a incisive girl with a most unusual companion.
Together in a kingdom murmuring with the unease of strange happenings, it seems that everyone has taken an interest in them, from mercenaries to mapmakers to the Regent himself- each with their own intentions. The two find themselves in a hectic run for survival- and perhaps more.
(Sorry if the synopsis sounds lame right now- I came up with it on the spot.) 75,862 words, 152 computer pages, as been heavily edited a few times now but still with a few (I feel) shaky areas. Grammar and technical structure i'm not overly worried about, as those are a pretty easy fix, mostly just overall opinions and opinions on the charactes, plot, etc. I'm working towards publishing this, so especially your first thoughts and opinions on the first three chapters is important.
If you would like to preview the project, the first three chapters are also attached, and if you decide after that that you don't want to read more, that's fine too. Feel free to pm me if you have any questions or comments!
EDIT: For parinoia reasons, I'm removing the full story- anybody still interested in critiquing it, feel free to pm me.
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