Young Writers Society

The past is but regret-filled chapter,
In my own autobiography.
A guilty, unwanted, forgotten blur,
Whose happy, smiling face escapes me.
But living in my past,
Will only make the present worse.
And as the memory is fading fast -
I cannot wait until it is nothing but a blank space,
Nothing but an empty verse.

The future is an epilogue,
Set in a time ages hence.
It hides behind the subtle mist and fog.
Encrypted codes, which I can make no sense.
But thinking of the tomorrows,
Would make me lose sight of the present.
And fantasise a world of no sorrows.
A world that is fair, and simple.
That is full of smiles, and free of torment.

What's left is the struggles of today,
With the past lost and forgotten.
And the future much to far away.
We can hope, and we can dream.
Live with colour and love with gleam.
In the moment, and in the now.
The present can be simply amazing,
Full of fireworks and full of wow.

Hi,there.Here I come with my special review on your masterpiece!LoL
Okay,actually this is a great poem.Wow.This is the beautiful poem I ever seen!The theme,and all the stanzas there are so awesome(bring their own message to the audience.


*What's left is the struggles of today,
With the past lost and forgotten.
And the future much to far away.
We can hope, and we can dream.
Live with colour and love with gleam.
In the moment, and in the now.
The present can be simply amazing,
Full of fireworks and full of wow.

*Especially for this stanza.Hey,you're just 14 but you already showed your talent there.Once again,I wanna say"WOW"!

Keep writing!
*NiGhT_WaLkEr

Hello Angus!

I like this poem very much and especially how you've divided it into the three stanzas respective to their time - past, future and present. I feel that these words came about from some sort of pondering that went on in your head and the result that you've shown is quite appealing!

You've managed to delve into the realms of this very densely debated and discussed topic - Time. The way you've described each episodic stanza is really good and the subtle, but resisting rhyming is quite interesting to read. Nice work!

You're a great writer and I hope to read more from you soon! Keep the ink flowing!

Murtuza

Hi, Angus! First off, I love how you divided the poem into three stanzas according to past, present, and future. It made the flow a lot better, and also easier to understand. The use of punctuation helps with the flow and comprehension of the piece too.

Though this whole poem was really good and very well writing, it is the last stanza that stood out to me..

What's left is the struggles of today,
With the past lost and forgotten.
And the future much to far away.
We can hope, and we can dream.
Live with colour and love with gleam.
In the moment, and in the now.
The present can be simply amazing,
Full of fireworks and full of wow.

You're fourteen, right? This really shows your true intellectual abilities. Keep up the good work!

-Bagel Baby