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Speak to me
let me create
vivid dreams
to come awake
Mystery unfolds
breathtaking detail
quite more than precious
my lover will soon see
Such emotion
beautiful disaster
messy, smudgy
But oh, oh so lovely
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Such emotion
beautiful disaster
messy, smudgy
But oh, oh so lovely
ladymarmalade wrote:Speak to me
let me create
vivid dreams
to come awake I loved this stanza! that last line 'to come awake' sounded a bit awkward and forced though...
Mystery unfolds
breathtaking detail
quite more than precious
my lover will soon see Maybe try to move the words around a little bit, their kind of chunky and strangely put together.
Such emotion
beautiful disaster
messy, smudgy
But oh, oh so lovelyI loved this last stanza, an excellent way to bring the whole thing together. Keep writing!
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