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Tue Apr 03, 2007 3:19 am
Certainly Love says...



no more
Last edited by Certainly Love on Tue Oct 06, 2009 3:27 am, edited 1 time in total.
Sincerely, Amanda R. Holden, Author of Azyea's GIfts
  





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Thu Apr 12, 2007 1:10 am
Crimson says...



I really, really liked it. I'm curious as to why he wasn't in the state to fall in love with someone.

The only thing I can think of that needs a itty-bitty bit of tweaking is this part....

He's good.


Since you used past tense in the rest of it, I'm pretty sure it should be 'He was good.'

I can't wait to try to find more of your works, I really enjoyed this.
  





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Sat May 12, 2007 4:16 pm
Night Mistress says...



it really good. you shoudl put up another piece here soon.
"I love you," she whispered in his ear, before taking his mouth with her own.

~Elizzabeth Grey of Addicting Posion
  








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