Hey Sol. Okie-dokie, I really enjoyed your story. It had a great idea going and I love the whole best friends falling for each other. It's great and you really made it good with the habits the characters have with one another. So your plot was good. Very well thought out.
For your characters, I think that you need to add more to them. At this point I'm not feeling them. I'm not feeling their emotions and their passion. From the point of view of the reader, we need to be able to actually see the characters as real people.
I don't have time to get into grammar right now, but overall it seemed fine.
Best of luck, Sol! Sorry this was such a short review.
Cheers, Luxe
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