No! No! I have to comment again!
I'm not usually one for knocking other people's critique... but the whole reeling off a list thing was what sold that part to me. It gave the whole impression of being totally unimportant to these two people figuring out that they like each other, and that's *good*! It's background information, it's the past, and this is the important stuff. Keep it short, keep it impersonal, keep it cast-off and discarded. I love it that way.
OK, that's all
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