This is the third story, i think, that I have read on here that it is brilliant. It made me feel like crying, a lot of the romantic short stories I have read on here have made me feel that way. Your writing is very good. I wish to read more of this, please.
You are worth every breath that I breathe, every beat of my heart. I would give my last breath to tell you that I love you.
I liked this. Maybe it was just me but I found it obvious that it was a same-sex paring. It was sensitive and done in a mature manner. The grammar was all correct and the structure seemed good. The only thing I would say is maybe give the characters a bit more description. Not the sex of the character, but rather the thoughts. Make it rich in detail and maybe have a stream of consciousness going on somewhere in there - right at the beginning in italics maybe? Otherwise, it was really nice. I look forward to reading some more of your work in the future. Keep writing.
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