Young Writers Society

This is amazing. I honestly loved it *Is not really who I am*
Nice description
But it seems that the girl was awkward towards it all like she was 10 years old and the boy, who was so confident and like... what was that word.... i forgot it... but like he knew what to do, makes him seem like he was 16. Which was a bit wrong.
14 years old? Totally, totally hard to believe.
Of course I read one like this (with the pornographic fixtures by a 15 year old so I won't complain)

You definitely handled this topic well. It's so easy when writing a sex scene to fall into disgusting smut, or overly poetic imagery. The pace was perfect, and the tone was great.

*looks around, wishing she were at home and not the library*

are you sure your 14 and not 18...i could swear you were...it was rather good and very umm how can i put it vivid...good job

Very good for anyone to write so well particulrly if your only 14 good job it was very desriptive good on you.