This is my first YWS story submission so please be nice. I know I need to work on my first person character (the voice of the story) but I can't seem to get it right so any help would be great. Thank you.
He sat at the opposite end of the couch, puffing on his cigarette and playing with my cell phone.
I watched him coyly, silently, nearly predatorily. For the last three years, we’d been considerably close friends. I don’t even remember why it had happened but we met on the playground on my first day of sixth grade when he was introduced to me as one of those boys “you should just avoid, he’s nothing but trouble.”
I remember scoffing at those words. Mostly for they’re irony, seeing as my reputation for mischief hadn’t reached this new school yet.
But the girl guiding me through the school didn’t know that. And she pointed out his friends as well. More trouble. There was the older one, tall for his age, who reminded me of Draco Malfoy if he were to wear glasses. And there was the thick, Irish boy with the crooked smile and a pair of rough workers hands. Knowing all three, I was reassured that I had found myself permanent friends.
And now, three years after the fact, I found myself sitting on the couch in the house of that boy who’s nothing but trouble, buzzed on vodka and reeking of cigarette smoke, wondering what to say and do.
I’d been in the house a dozen times before. It wasn’t the nicest place in town by all means but it had a familiar charm and there were days when I felt more at home in his house then in my own.
Very abruptly, he looked over at me and stuck out his tongue with a big smile plastered across his chubby face. Max. My sweet little Max. Though I was only a year older then him, I felt like such a child and mother too him in an uncontrollable pattern.
Now I felt like the mother, looking upon her impish, guilty son.
And it flipped again. Impulsively I stuck my tongue back out at him and laughed. “You’ll never win.”
“Win what?” He had a confused look plastered across his face.
“Win me, win the game, you’ll just never win,” I teased. In that new moment, I felt like a child and on impulse sprang over too sit next too him, cuddling into his side.
I was dwarfed by his size. Max was never a small boy nor had I ever been the small girl but I knew he could easily pick me up and toss me over his shoulder.
“I don’t believe you,” he responded. And in a move that shocked me and thrilled me, he ran a hand through my hair and wrapped his arm around my shoulder, pressing me closer.
For his warmth, I could only be thankful. But I was suddenly quavering at his affectionate touch. It wasn’t like him. It wasn’t like any of the boys I had gathered around me to be sincerely compassionate.
Yeah, I had used my Irish thug for a pillow but he had lain beneath me as if he were terrified of my own display of warmth. And my almost-Draco had served as a source of heat on more than one occasion. But Max had always been my plaything, never one I would have given the time to stoke away the stray hairs from his face or to pick the lint from his sweatshirt.
For the first time ever, I was completely out of my element. And he was just grinning. Not in a way that made me believe him to be in on a joke I wasn’t, but a smile of contentment.
I mimicked his smile but I couldn’t made myself fall into him the way I almost instinctively knew he wanted me too.
“If I wanted to win you, how would I do it?”
I tried to think of something brazen to say but the honesty was too much to lie through. “You wouldn’t have to try.”
“Thought so.”
Why was I being so bipolar with him? I wanted so badly to be comfortable with him like I was with others but I sought to keep him at the distance we’d always maintained.
“Why would you think that?”
“You love me and you know it.”
I couldn’t deny the fact. But how much so is harder to tell. “And do you love me?”
The question must have caught him off guard because he hesitated to answer. I didn’t know if I should be relieved or upset.
“Depends on whether or you want me to win you.” Max grinned at the cheekiness of his response.
My heart shuddered and I could feel my leg twitching uncontrollably out of nervous habit. “You’ve already won me, why would you want to give me up.”
And with all the grace I could muster, I leaned up, kissed him on the cheek and fell into him in a way I had been afraid to do with anyone ever.
He didn’t hesitate to secure me to his side in his arms and he dropped his head against mine. “I could never give you up.”
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