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Mon Jun 13, 2011 2:10 am
torie1234 says...



Pow! And there it was, He finally made a home run. It was so amazing how he did it I dont know how but he did it. As i set and watched him i listend to the crowed cheer him on,Ruth!Ruth! back to back it never ended.Afther the world witnised that he was great they finally knew who he really was. His name was "The Great Bambino".It was so amazing because Babe Ruth had won the World Series............Ruth was a mainstay in the Yankees' lineup that won seven pennants and four World Series titles during his tenure with the team. After a short stint with the Boston Braves in 1935, Ruth retired. In 1936, Ruth became one of the first five players elected to the Baseball Hall of Fame.

Ruth has since become regarded as one of the greatest sports heroes in American culture. He has been named the greatest baseball player in history in various surveys and rankings, and his home run hitting prowess and charismatic personality made him a larger than life figure in the "Roaring Twenties". Off the field he was famous for his charity, but also was noted for his often reckless lifestyle. Ruth is credited with changing baseball itself. The popularity of the game exploded in the 1920s, largely due to his influence. Ruth ushered in the "live-ball era", as his big swing led to escalating home run totals that not only excited fans, but helped baseball evolve from a low-scoring, speed-dominated game to a high-scoring power game.

In 1998, The Sporting News ranked Ruth number one on the list of "Baseball's 100 Greatest Players".In 1999, baseball fans named Ruth to the Major League Baseball All-Century Team. In 1969, he was named baseball's Greatest Player Ever in a ballot commemorating the 100th anniversary of professional baseball. In 1993, the Associated Press reported that Muhammad Ali was tied with Babe Ruth as the most recognized athletes, out of over 800 dead or alive athletes, in America. The study found that over 97% of Americans over 12 years of age identified both Ali and Ruth. According to ESPN, he was the first true American sports celebrity superstar whose fame transcended baseball. In a 1999 ESPN poll, he was ranked as the third-greatest US athlete of the century, behind Michael Jordan and Muhammad Ali.

Ruth was the first player to hit 60 home runs in one season (1927), setting the season record which stood until broken by Roger Maris in 1961. Ruth's lifetime total of 714 home runs at his retirement in 1935 was a record, until first surpassed by Hank Aaron in 1974. Unlike many power hitters, Ruth also hit for average: his .342 lifetime batting is tenth highest in baseball history, and in one season (1923) he hit .393, a Yankee record.His .690 career slugging percentage and 1.164 career on-base plus slugging (OPS) remain the Major League records.Ruth dominated the era in which he played. He led the league in home runs during a season twelve times, slugging percentage and OPS thirteen times each, runs scored eight times, and runs batted in (RBIs) six times. Each of those totals represents a modern record (as well as the all-time record, except for RBIs).
  





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Wed Jun 15, 2011 11:52 pm
thegilliangill says...



Howdy there!

I'm going to critique your work today!

The first word really drags me in but the second sentence lets it down a little. I wouldn't recommend starting a sentence with and, it's too plain, especially for a beginning, it needs more excitement. The 'and' isn't needed at all. Secondly, the 'h' doesn't need a capital letter if there is a comma, unless you change that comma after the was to a full stop.

Pow!] And there it was, He finally made a home run.


This sentence seems a little broken, more mature words could be used, or change the phrasing of the sentence? Also there needs to be an apostrophe in the word don't.

It was so amazing how he did it I dont know how but he did it.


The 'i' needs a capital letter and after the word 'ended.' there needs to be a space before the next sentence. The word 'After' is spelt incorrectly.

As i set and watched him i listend to the crowed cheer him on,Ruth!Ruth! back to back it never ended.Afther the world


Why is there the use of 'babe' here is it necessary? Also, the ellipses is too long.
because Babe Ruth had won the World Series...........


Other than this, I think the layout was great, and this is obviously something you feel passionate about which really comes across.

Keep writing well done, just remember to check through your work!
~TheGillianGill~

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Sun Jun 26, 2011 11:18 pm
tgirly says...



There's ALOT of grammer and spelling mistakes, and they were VERY distracting. You're sorta new, so I'll give you some slack, but please, in the future, edit before you post. I'm not really into sports (being a girl), but it seems like you did your research and knew a lot about it. So, good job.
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