Young Writers Society

I hate it when the first thing people say about short poetry is that they wish you would "expand it."
So of course I'm going to say just that.
Only because I really like the theme you have going here-- I like the juxstaposition between sunshine and rain, I like the imagery, but I think it needs a little more rhythm.
I'm not saying you need structure or stanzas, but I feel like it's just getting started and then it's over. Which maybe that's part of what you're trying to convey; in that case good job. But I think if you just added another paragraph, or thought, it would make the ending resonate more and give it a more completed feel.
Besides that, really loved

Jelly wrote:All the days are melding together

Only nitpick, really-- not sure how I feel about the word melding. It sounds to mechanical; also don't change it to melting. I misread it as that the first time and that doesn't quite work either.
Other than that, great job.

This was really fantastic! I love the easy flow of your words. The first sentence "The sky’s summerblue with simmering dust." really did a good job of drawing me in. The only thing I have to note on actually was the same sentece :-p. Maybe you meant to say: "shimmering dust" instead of "simmering dust." Haha correct me if im wrong, because simmering may fit Anyway, other than that, wonderful job! Keep on writing!