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Dragons' Legend



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Wed Mar 21, 2007 11:49 pm
Lethero says...



“Dragons, fantasy or reality? That’s the question cryptozoologists have been trying to prove, but only met dead ends by reality. Can there be a creature who is not an insect but have six external limbs or that can breathe fire.

“If dragons are real why hasn’t one been spotted or a skeleton been found? Well, my friends the search is over, I have found undeniable proof of their existence and where they live. Finally the search for dragons is over...”

My first Sci-fi book, so I hope it's good. If you think it belongs in a different genre please tell.
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Thu Mar 22, 2007 12:11 am
Sean Pendr says...



Quote: [“Dragons, fantasy or reality? That’s the question cryptozoologists have been trying to prove, but only met dead ends by reality. Can there be a creature who is not an insect but have six external limbs or that can breathe fire.

“If dragons are real why hasn’t one been spotted or a skeleton been found? Well, my friends the search is over, I have found undeniable proof of their existence and where they live. Finally the search for dragons is over...” ]

Great way of introducing your story, continue and make the extended to become your prologue.
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Fri Mar 23, 2007 8:42 am
Alteran says...



It's a good why of introduceing. Though you could just have this being the opening of the first chapter. It's a great way to draw in the readers.

I think it's a good spot. It's not fantasy it's definantly science fiction.
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Sun Mar 25, 2007 5:21 pm
Pyxis says...



Great introduction. Most dragon books are fantasy, so this one should be really interesting. I can't wait to read more! 10/10, definately

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