Young Writers Society

I really liked it. I don't read much sci-fi, so when I do it's fascinating to me. Don't ask why, it just is.

The only thing I really disliked about this piece were the minor spelling errors. Just little things really.

sceptically

Should have a 'k' instead of a 'c' at the beginning.

advance

advanced?

Regardless, I really enjoyed this. I will definitely read more if you decide to continue, but its pretty interesting as is. I think if you tweaked it a bit it'd be great. But I did really like it.

Great story! Although I think that maybe the plot is a bit shallow (only the confrontation between Kaoiren and Lithre) the delivery is great. The emotions conveyed are ones I can really relate to (teachers...). The idea behind the story was very good. You HAVE to write a sequel or three! Come on have some compassion we all want to know what happens next!!

arei: Thank's for point them out . I admit... I didn't actually spell check this piece. It must be litered with mistakes.

mike: Glad you enjoyed this, but I'm afraid I have no intentions at all of writing any sequals.

Wait a minute...here's Jack, your friendly-neighbourhood English speaker

Sureal is English and as such spells "sceptically" with a C.

Tis all arei's fault - she confused me with her heathen language .

I liked this story. I have a alien-phobia, but I still kept reading. It is well thought out.

I really liked this. I really don't have anything that I specifically wanted to comment on, but I've read this twice now, and really enjoyed it. So I thought that I should at least drop by and say so.

Kitly and Dusky: Glad you enjoyed it .