I'm all new here, and I felt the urge to post one of my rough works, which isn't even a beginning of a story, just a portion. Here it is: The Dead Squad (just a working title). And I haven't done revisions either. Just a piece from the heart (stranger things have come out of my heart).
We stood expectantly. All nineteen martyrs that we should have been waited in silence, sweat dribbling from our filthy heads to run through the creases of our soiled fatigues. In the air a dark sensation hung, a sinister apprehension that gripped our leaden legs and held them in place, that crawled up our backs to stop our throats and wound around our ribs, squeezing our deadened hearts to make them weak against the terrors to come. It rendered us as we had been the day we returned from our first horrifying mission, with death in our eyes and terror on our skins, our relief and exuberance from arrival swept away, and our eyes whose sparkle had been dulled seeing only a future of torment and sorrow.
Our commander paced before us. His clothing was rumpled, like ours, in an attempt to connect with us, to pragmatically gain our respect, but it was far too clean. Even when ours were washed we could feel the blood that soaked the garments, see the million red stains that represented the teammates who had spilled their lifeblood in our arms.
His voice was deep and commanding, his arms were muscular, and his face was weathered and scarred. He had the presence of an apt leader, a quality which had ruthlessly pushed him through the ranks till he could meddle among the political leaders, and all would look to him for strength and reassurance. In his eyes was cunning, a frightening characteristic that distinguished him from the military men, that commanded acquiescence. We could see into his soul, though, and in it was nothing that we had seen or felt, no irreparable brokenness, no crippling of his every emotion. So it meant nothing to us, and we followed him not out of terror, not out of fear of consequences of dissention, but because there was nothing else to do in our damaged lives, nothing we could do. We could not love, could not live a life free from the hurt we had suffered here, could not have a family other than the ones we were bonded with. The general who had not sent all of us to our deaths, but had nonetheless dragged from us our ultimate sacrifice, continued to lead us.
But on my tongue I could feel a change in the stagnant air, an ominous feeling that something would change, catapulting all of us from our steady routine into a terrifying new.
His pacing had stopped minutes ago, but he was simply staring into each of our eyes, and for each time he stared into the eyes of my comrades it felt like he was staring into mine, and when his gaze moved across my face it felt as if the eyes he saw were not my own.
Finally he opened his mouth, and for a moment he faltered uncharacteristically, and for the first time I could see fear sweep into his expression. But it swept away just as quickly, and he began to brief us.
“Soldiers,” he began, clearing his throat while he formulated ideas. “You’ve fought creatures no human has ever faced before. You’ve gone on missions considered suicide by all, and you’ve fought longer, harder, and with more fury than I’ve seen anyone fight for before, be it supersoldier or grunt, for freedom or for patriotism. No one compares with you, and that is why you’re the best of the best, and you’re my soldiers.”
We continued to stare. He began each speech like this, keeping the pretense that everything was normal, as it was in the beginning, to keep himself sane when we had already tipped over the edge.
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