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The Diamond Fist: Prologue
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Points: 573
Reviews: 39
Mon Jan 23, 2012 5:30 pm
HHemayed
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Hi!This is excellent!
I think it's a bit long, but I'm no expert.
I didn't notice anything wrong or mysterious, but there's one thing:
(around neck)
I think you ought to say: (around my neck)
Good luck with everything. Keep writing.
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We shall not cease from exploration, and the end of all our exploring will be to arrive where we started and know the place for the first time.
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