Ok, guys. This is just an extract - the first few paragraphs - which I'm not sure about. I don't know if what I'm saying makes sense. Or whether it's a big clunky.
I'm also using the same character as I have done previously for another novel preject - in case you recognised him
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It was the festival of Giving-Light and the village of Spreast slept quietly under the moon's grace. Or at least it seemed that way. Under the steadily falling snowflakes, Okrol was still awake, in a small room, on a small farm, just outside of the village.
He had come back late from hunting alone in the near-by forest, looking for a last minute auction submission. Hopefully it would make some money for the farm. There was no prize from Okrol's hunt though; darkness had moved swiftly in, and everyone knows – 'the forest is a dangerous place in the dark'.
By candle-light, he combed his long brown hair, peering into the mirror as he hurried. He was late, and needed to be in bed and asleep by twelve. It was tradition to do so on the eve of Giving-Light, and meant he would be refreshed and replenished for the first moments he was awake tomorrow. Tomorrow would be the celebrations; a time of peace and giving and the happiest day of the year.
Spreast was the only village left that celebrated the ancient festival, but they did it in style: free beer and free food were available, followed by a day and night of dancing to the traditional, magical sounding flute concert. The village hall would be packed with residents, and at the end of the night, before the clock strikes twelve, adulthood ceremonies would take place, followed by blessings and – the 'Giving of Light'.
Okrol had finished his regime now and lay comfortably on his bed, thinking about the coming day. He knew his adulthood ceremony was a long way away. Being an adult in Spreast wasn't a matter of age, but a matter of attitude and wisdom, combined with age. He lay there and thought – 'What have I ever done for the village. I'm no hero.'
The house was peaceful and only the faint snoring of Okrol's father, Belphin, could be heard. Okrol didn't mind though, it was homely and was what he had grown up with since his mother's death.
Ready to embrace his dreams, Okrol rolled over onto his side, blew the candle out, and fell asleep in the darkness.
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