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Shoot. The bell rings, and I have to be in Mr. Kyoski’s third period math class before the hall monitors hunt me down. I pile my books in my left hand before slamming the weathered locker door shut with my right. Shifting the books from my left hand back over, I shimmy into the old, gray hoodie that’s only half way on.
I’m pretty good at multitasking.
Mr. Kyoski spends a lot of time in the bathroom before class so I’m pretty much home free if I can make it past the hall monitors. They take their job pretty seriously. My ballet flats click against the white tile as I count the doors to Mr. Kyoski’s. I slide through the opening into the chaos that I call class.
I feel for Mr. Kyoski.
Junior math classes are always the worst. For one, I’m being hit with at least three paper airplanes as I turn right down the rows of graffiti-covered desks. I can barely hear myself think over the yelling of the jocks huddled in a corner. Oh, and don’t think it gets any better during class. Someone’s always snickering about Mr. Kyoski’s Chinese accent.
I find an open desk and flip my brown, wavy hair around so I can put my books under it. It doesn’t really matter who I’m sitting by. Just like with bees, if you don’t mess with anyone, no one will mess with you. Until I look over and see I’ve snagged a seat next to Aaron. Aaron Mancini. I quickly glance through the chaos to see if there are any other seats I can slip into unnoticed, but nope, I have to sit here.
I try to avoid Aaron at all costs, because, supposedly, girls put him in the ‘perfect’ category. But no one can be perfect; not even Aaron. So I avoid him…until today. Fantastic.
I try to make it through the lesson Mr. Kyoski has planned out for us, but I can’t. My mind is off in the pool, my arms and legs pulling me through the water in all four strokes until the bell rings. I have officially four minutes to get from here to my locker and on to the other side of the school for English. I write down my homework from the whiteboard onto a piece of paper ripped from my notebook and stash it in my jeans pocket. I don’t have any time to waste.
Until I find Aaron looking up into my blue eyes from his seat.
“Hey.” He manages, “You have really pretty eyes.”
I want to say ‘thank you’, but I can’t. Because that’s not what I feel at all. Looking into his picturesque brown eyes, I only feel the envy boiling up from inside of me. So I blurt it out. Standing right there, one hand in my messenger bag, talking to Aaron Mancini.
“I always wanted to have brown eyes, even when I was little. I wanted people to look into my eyes and forget about the rest of the world. I wanted them to forget their lives, forget what had been planned out for them, and feel the warmth in my brown eyes. To love all that was there and nothing more.” I whisper.
And then I jolt back into reality and run out the door. I mean, I’m literally running. And just thinking about what happened brings a pang of embarrassment and I wince at it. Because for the very first time, I’ve talked to Aaron Mancini, someone I’ve tried to avoid all along, and I’ve embarrassed myself so much with something that could have been a two word conversation. Great Bekah, just great.
But I force myself to forget about it all so I can make it on time to English, even though the look of his eyes on mine is still there.
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