Couple of things to add:
I'm pretty sure it's aeroplanes, not airplanes or air planes, but maybe thats a UK thing.
You wrote "showing of" when i think you meant "showing off".
Apart from that, I agree with the other comments. Just a make sure you don't make your sentences too long and make sure the meaning is always clear.
P.S you say "the panic was indescribable," Then go on to describe it. I found this slightly ironic.
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