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First time at writing, please help with title



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Sat Sep 23, 2006 7:29 pm
Broken Wings says...



Yes, very good for your first time. I didn't read through all of it though, I just don't like reading that much that isn't in a book or on word. Not to mention I'm too lazy to XD

Anyways, it's kind of confusing to even comment at all. Try to explain more, and don't use so much description. I'm not saying description is a bad thing, everyone loves it. But using to much of it just makes it seem like you're trying way too hard.
  





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Sat Sep 23, 2006 8:28 pm
Snoink says...



Hehehe... I didn't see this before!

How about "Hellfire" as a name?
Ubi caritas est vera, Deus ibi est.

"The mark of your ignorance is the depth of your belief in injustice and tragedy. What the caterpillar calls the end of the world, the Master calls the butterfly." ~ Richard Bach

Moth and Myth <- My comic! :D
  








It had a perfectly round door like a porthole, painted green, with a shiny yellow brass knob in the exact middle. The door opened on to a tube-shaped hall like a tunnel: a very comfortable tunnel without smoke, with panelled walls, and floors tiled and carpeted, provided with polished chairs, and lots and lots of pegs for hats and coats—the hobbit was fond of visitors. The tunnel wound on and on, going fairly but not quite straight into the side of the hill —The Hill, as all the people for many miles round called it—and many little round doors opened out of it, first on one side and then on another.
— JRR Tolkien