Hi! Well, this is a new story I wrote and wanted to get some critiques so rip it apart! I appreciate any suggestions for the title, thanks! Oh, and I know this is pretty short, I plan to extend it a bit. Also, notice I typed this up real fast fo it stinks anyway. ; )
Chapter One
Cora
I peered through the telescope, tapping the zoom button and the planets suddenly were right in front of me. The telescope was great, a good choice for a present on my dad's part.
That's when something caught my eye, I zoomed in closer on my telescope. It was some sort of flying machine. It had lights all around it, shooting rays of different colors. It span as it got closer and closer. My dad studied U.F.O.'s. He had shared all his theories and thoughts with me and a spaceship was the first thing that came to mind
" Dad! Dad, come out here! Dad!" I screeched into the house. My father raced out, his glasses bouncing about on his nose, a kitchen towel in his hand.
" What is it Cora?" he asked, stopping by my side and sliding his glasses up his nose so he could see better.
I pointed to the telescope, "I saw a U.F.O.!" My father's bright blue eyes widened, you see, you could call him a nerd. He was all into the science stuff and I guess I had taken after him.
He handed me his glasses and peered into the scope. I watched as he pressed the zoom button over and over. He backed away from the telescope and I handed him back his glasses.
" By golly, Cora. I think you did!" he exclaimed, his face lighting up in excitement. His feet pounded heavy on the wood porch and into the house.
" Darling, come here! Cora's found a U.F.O.!" My father exclaimed, calling my mom to come and see. But instead of my mom my older brother, Derek came out.
" Sweet, Lemme see!" Derek shouted, sprinting to my telescope and smashing his face against it. I watched as my dad babbled about my discovery to my mom as she listened intently.
"Dude! Holy crap! What is that?" Derek asked. My dad came over and patted him on the shoulder.
" I told you a U.F.O." I said proudly. His mouth fell open. He slipped his cell phone out of his back pocket and dialed a number.
" Dude, aliens are taking over!" He spoke into the phone, probably telling his friends. Derek walked back into the house.
My dad was calling somebody,too. He spoke rapidly into the phone, pacing back and forth. I looked back into the scope, and gulped. It was so close.
"Guys it's getting closer!" I yelled at my parents. My dad, still on the phone, came by my side. Almost pushing me aside to look into my telescope.
" Cora?" He said, his eyes still glued to the telescope.
" Yes?" I replied softly. He looked at me and then to my mother.
" Get inside the house." He said, staring at me intently. He was dead serious. Before I could go back inside a loud boom rang in my ears and shook the house. I fell to my knees and cried out in surprise.
Derek came back out, screeching wildly into the phone. The lights were closer now. I covered my ears with my hands and screamed with the rest of my family.
I glanced behind me, the machine landed in our yard. Police sirens rang through the streets. My dad crawled over to me and put his arm over my shoulder.
" Get in the basement, the invasion had began."
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