Young Writers Society

There is darkness when I turn my head
Always this numbing sensation calling out to me
Where it comes from no one knows all thats known
is
Chorus
Im broken up inside
nothing left to give and i cant believe (oo)
Im tired of all the lies
so broken up inside
There used to be a time I looked forward to the day
no its all gone burnt up in hates hellfire (nothing left to give)
Im so through with it all nothing ever comes to easy in this world
Nothing left but shatterd dream and nothing that ever goes away
Repeat chorus (1x)
I cant really go on anymore in this world
filled with all I hate to see and all I hate to have
nothing ever changes so why should i believe
its time to say goodbye now, time to leave this behind now (so broken up inside)
Repeat chorus(1x)
Im so through
Im so done
Nothing ever changes
always broken up inside.
(by the way no im not sucideial so dont freak, its just a song)

You kind of seemed depressed. Did you write this about cody or something cuz that's what it sounds like. Anyway, I don't know what it is about this song but it just doesn't sound smooth like songs usually do...sounds good but i dunno.

I really like it Jaylynn! It's good for the band and can't wait till get the beat going and pick out a tempo and the write chords and such for it. Can't wait!

Stacey xoxo

Hey ashley rox dont use my real name...lol...and no kay-kay its not about cody but thanx...i wasnt depressed either

Sorry little dreamer I didn't mean to reveal your true identity. lol! Sorry...but the song is truly good!

Im so through
Im so done

is really nice. when you have really long phrasing, these things stand out more so you dont have to be overly eloquent about them.

Thanx 4 the crit...I need all of it...

short lines always seem to get your pont across better. pretty cool but it needs more of a strictr pattern if you want it to be "catchy"

Its good! I hate it when I see lyrics and I cant here the bloody song... >.<

Sorry for the languge!