Young Writers Society

Well I have another for all you who read me and Ashlee rox's Lyrics...

Falling all around
Rain falls around me as
I stare into the dark and
walk the lonely path of my
life cursed to walk it alone(hold)
Chorus
Rain falls down washing
away my fears, all the death
and pain of the harsh life we live
claiming souls always stalking always silent
I can hear it calling my name
washing over me, collecting my
soul for its own and theres nothing
I can do, I can do(Hold)
Repeat chorus (1x)
Hold me, Help me
walk this path I cant do it alone
Im falling washing away in your
ocean of pain, I cant even stand up, im
to weak, can you hear my cry(Hold)
Repeat chorus (1x)
I can feel it, feel it(hold)
coming down, I see it
see it coming down my face
Rain is falling, falling all around
I can hear it claiming me(yell)taking me away(hold, but yell last note)
HOPE YOU GUYS LIKE THIS ONE

I like it Little Dreamer...lol...it's awesome!!! ;D

I'm sorry, but i do not like this. Its wayyyyyyy too Boulevarde of Broken Dreams for my liking. I guess you can take that as a compliment though. Still, didnt much like it.

Keep writing though. Always keep writing.

does those underlined counts?

The lyrics seem good to me ( goodbad ) but not sure about the timing and/or counts...

I agree with Inertia; when you see the words "lonely path" and "walk alone" together, you immediately think of Boulevard. And what's with all the underlined verses?