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Tue May 24, 2005 5:26 pm
Harley says...



Why are you trying to change me?
Why can’t you just leave me be?
Is it your mission to hurt me?
If so then I think it’s complete.

If you could fly would you pick me up and drop me from the height?
If you could soar would you soar on straight past me?
If I could run I would be long gone,
But you keep coming back
It’s like you’re glue
I stick to you
Maybe that means more

Chorus:
Do you love me?
Is that why you act this way?
Do you think of me?
Through the night, all through the day
Simple questions
Seem so difficult for you
Simple questions aren’t so simple any more

Why do your words always hurt me?
Why can’t I brush them aside?
Why do I care what you think of me?
How come it hurt when you lied?

If you could fly would you disappear without a word to me?
If you could soar, would it be me who held you down?
If I could run I would run away
And I’d never look back
I’m incomplete
But it’s no defeat
I’ll beat you one day

Chorus x2

No the questions aren’t as easy as before
If you don’t answer I’ll stand up
And I’ll walk out that damn door

You don’t love me
You act like this ‘cause you feel like it
You don’t think of me
What a load of sh*t
Simple questions
Told me all I needed to know
Screw you- I gotta go

[i'm not sure about the last line- any ideas?]
  





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Tue May 24, 2005 6:06 pm
deleted6 says...



One conclusion u like writing songs oh well.Very good it very good but wat it about i am totally confused but good
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Tue May 24, 2005 6:53 pm
Harley says...



huh?

it's about a girl whose boyfriend pushes her around a lot and she's sick of it

that post is extremely confusing
  





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Tue May 24, 2005 7:12 pm
Emma says...



lol

The ending.. Hmm Im not sure on it either.. I love the rest though! such feeling put into it! :D

Omg.. I'll shut up now.. -mutters into self-

YOU BETTER SING IT TO ME TOMOZ! :P
  





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Fri May 27, 2005 7:18 pm
Lollipop says...



Hee hee! Actually, I loved the last line! The rest of the song was really good too!
Way hay!!!!
  





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Fri May 27, 2005 8:22 pm
nickelpickle says...



that post is extremely confusing


All of his are and he ignores everyone when they try to tell him that...

Anyway, excellent as your work always is.... Very emotional, excellent format....
"There's a light at each end of this tunnel,
You shout 'cause you're just as far in as you'll ever be out
And these mistakes you've made, you'll just make them again
If you only try turning around."
  





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Sun May 29, 2005 1:04 pm
Harley says...



Thanks Nikki! So true about Fontroy- dude, you kinda need to write in plain english when you're critiquing- it's sorta annoying, to be honest.

Thanks everyone your comments- they help a lot. xx
  








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