Young Writers Society

Here's me singing this song...
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=n2ihjeXsmXs

I'd like to tell you what it's like
The way I feel for you inside
But the words just won't come out
I don't think you'd believe them anyhow

There's so many things that I'd like to say
But they all sound like the same old cliche
I don't know how to tell you how I feel
I can't think of anything that sounds slightly real
But if I hold you
If I touch you
If I kiss you
Would you believe me then?
Would you believe me then?

Sometimes words are used too much
They lose their meaning, they aren't enough
I'm tired of holding back the truth
Would you believe me if I told you?

There's so many thing that I'd like to say
But they all sound like the same old cliche
I don't know how to tell you how I feel
I can't think of anything that sounds slightly real
But if I hold you
If I touch you
If I kiss you
Would you believe me then?
Would you believe me then?

These words have been used thousands of times before
So much, I don't even know what they mean anymore
So many people, everyday
Everyone using the same cliche
I'm not the first and I'm not the last
To say words I don't mean in the past
This time I mean it, what I say
But would you believe it anyway?

There's so many thing that I'd like to say
But they all sound like the same old cliche
I don't know how to tell you how I feel
I can't think of anything that sounds slightly real
But if I hold you
If I touch you
If I kiss you
Would you believe me then?
Would you believe me then?

Believe me now
I love you

Wow...people thought i was an awsome song writer, i would love to hear this sung! its amazing i know its about love/heart brake but you twisted it.

Keep writing!!

RIS!

That was absolutely wonderful, it sounds like the type of beautiful catchy song that you can't help but sing to when it comes on the radio. it even sounds like a song some one could cry to when they are feeling really devastated.

Really good, looking forward to seeing more of your work
Keep writing!

Hi! What's up?
There was only one error I found in this and it was obviously accidental.

emalily wrote:There's so many things that I'd like to say

emalily wrote:Sometimes words are used too much
They lose their meaning, they aren't enough

(My favourite bit)
This flows really well and the rhymes really work and I love it very muchly!!!
Hope to see more of your work!
Smashles

I love it! I would definatly listen to this song.

emalily wrote:I'd like to tell you what it's like
The way I feel for you inside
But the words just won't come out
I don't think you'd believe them anyhow

There's so many things that I'd like to say
But they all sound like the same old cliche
I don't know how to tell you how I feel
I can't think of anything that sounds slightly real
But if I hold you
If I touch you
If I kiss you
Would you believe me then?

Sometimes words are used too much
They lose their meaning, they aren't enough
I'm tired of holding back the truth
Would you believe me if I told you?

There's so many thing that I'd like to say
But they all sound like the same old cliche
I don't know how to tell you how I feel
I can't think of anything that sounds slightly real
But if I hold you
If I touch you
If I kiss you
Would you believe me then?
Would you believe me then?

These words have been used thousands of times before
So much, I don't even know what they mean anymore
So many people, everyday
Everyone using the same cliche
I'm not the first and I'm not the last
To say words I don't mean in the past
This time I mean it, what I say
But would you believe it anyway?

There's so many thing that I'd like to say
But they all sound like the same old cliche
I don't know how to tell you how I feel
I can't think of anything that sounds slightly real
But if I hold you
If I touch you
If I kiss you
Would you believe me then?
Would you believe me then?

Believe me now
I love you

I wouldnt of put it in twice.

I've asked my friend this question he honestly doesn believe me.

If this was sung to him I think, he'd understand.

this is probably one of my favorite things to read in a while. it flows very nicely and it keeps a good pace. you can imagine it being sung. by a beautiful voice. you have a knack for word choice and stopping point.

all and all it is very good, i must say I am in love with your work

Crazily Loving,
Zoe Renee Smith

Hey, this song is beautiful. I would love to hear it with the music and all. I like the way eachline has rhimed, and repetition of Would you Believe Me Then.
This song flows very nicely I can imagine it beign sang in my head right now. All together this song is beautiful, catchy with the repetition, great and amazing, very emotional in a good way and full of love and I love it;)

This is beautiful!
I love the concept behind it and you've conveyed the message well throughout each verse. I'm in love with the chorus too, and your voice is truly amazing. Keep writing, keep singing, and keep posting. You've got talent!!
Icy