Young Writers Society

Curtains closed, not a crack of light,
I don’t want to let myself see
Just how bad we really are.

I’m addicted and it’s just you and me,
Sittin’ in this darkened room,
Without a light to guide our way,

You’ve hurt me, torn my heart in two,
Shattered me so many times,
I’m being held together
by a fragile string of hope…

It’s not healthy how I keep comin’ back,
I let you in my heart over and over…
Ooh, but I’m addicted…
You’re my drug, love,
And I’ll always return for more.

Ohhh, addicted to you,
Your love –can we still call it that?
Love, love, love, no…
You’re my drug, hon,
It’s … not… love!

We’ll never get anywhere
Without a light to guide our way,
But I’m content to just stay this way….

‘Cause hon, I’m addicted
And I just won’t let myself see
Just how bad we really are. [It’s not love…]

Oooh, no, I won’t see…
I’m addicted to you, [addicted…]
So as long as it’s just you and me,
I’ll be fine, oh, sittin’ in this darkened room…
[sittin’ in this darkened room…]

Oh oh oh, I’ll be fine…
‘Cause hon, I’m addicted…
To you! And me! And as long
As you don’t get bored, oh, [It’s not love…]

I’ll keep comin’ back for more,
And you’ll tear my heart in two again
And step on the pieces
On your way out the door…

But that’s okay, I’ll walk wounded
‘Cause I’m addicted
And I ain’t gonna let myself see
Just how bad we are
Just as long as it’s you and me…

Is this still love?
No, no, no, it’s not love,
But hon, I’ll pretend…
Just for you, [you’re my drug…]

THIS IS LOVE!

Oh no, no, no…
It’s not, hon, I can’t –I can’t –
I’m tellin’ you now, I won’t be back!
And I’m lyin’, because so long…
As it’s just you an’ me…
I won’t let myself see.

I’m addicted.

Howdy there!

I just wanted to say I love the content of your set of lyrics and I think the way you set it out was perfect however it was a little confusing.

What I mean by this was I couldn't really find an established chorus, something that a standard set of lyrics would go back to, it just seems like your lyrics move onto a new verse each time which is confusing and I am not sure whether that would work.

Just my opinion

Overall, well done!

Okay, people, before anyone starts complainin', I just want to say that I have no clue why the spacing is all whacky. I did my best to make the stanzas and stuff readable, but it's still double-spaced and I have no idea why. So don't get yer panties in a wad.
Sorry,
TSM

This poem is good and its funny how the characture keeps coming back like a drug with out his fix. I enjoyed this poem, looking forward to more of your work.

That was cool, and very emotional. You definitely caught the idea of this guy being addicted.

I'm being held togetherby a fragile string of hope...

I think these were my favorite lines. They made the character sound totally abandoned, yet he/she hadn't completely given up.

I let you in my heart again over and over...

Somehow again over and over just doesn't sound quite right. Maybe you could say over and over again, or just take out the again completely.

'Cuz hon, I'm addicted

I'm sure you know it's 'cause, but I just thought I'd point that out anyway.

And you'll tear my heart in two again
And step on the pieces
On your way out the door...

I also liked those lines, it added to how desperate and addicted the narrator is. So, yeah, I liked this. You said it was a song, so I was trying to kind of sing it to myself... but realized I have no clue what tune it would have or what it would sound like in song form. As a poem though, it sounded good.

I really liked it and I can relate to a lot of what you described. The only thing that I had a little problem with was the repetitive word "addicted". Yes, I know that is bascially the main theme of the song lyric about the indivual being addicted to the person that they love, but it was kind of used a little too much in my opinion. Good song lyric though.

This is a really good song -- It definitely describes what it can be like to be unsure if a relationship is simply an addiction or actual love. Good job!