Young Writers Society

You make me sick
Ratings are a means to make you seem sympathetic
You make me cringe
Speaking with that firm tone, but clearly apathetic
I hate you so
For you push for death, pain, and all that's diabolic
When will this go?

Oh, this is just a job for you
Oh, her death was graphic
but you insisted it had to be shown
Oh, this is just your paycheck now
Oh, two years old and dead
As you crave laudation as her body's shown

And death is a reality
Numbingly increasing your visual vitality
Don't act as if you care, my friend
End all of this bullshit, we can tell it's just all pretend
Recheck your fucking passport, man
Shame, you get another free trip to a different land
Omit your true identity
No one is ashamed of any moral complexity

Oh, this is just a job for you
Oh, How death is graphic
but you insist that it has to be shown
Oh, this is just a paycheck now
Oh, a dead man is dragged
As you crave laudation as his body's shown

Camera's will always be on
Or you will serve no meaningful purpose and be outdone
Options have no purpose for us
Prescripition for chaos is such a profitable must
Entitling you to be upfront
Restoring your strict dedication not to be the runt

When will you go?
You make me sick
You make me cringe
I hate you so

OK, I think anyone reading this will definitely feel the hatred and passion for whoever, I really don't know the details of your rant about this news anchor but you sure wrote one hell of a poem. I think I noticed some cursing and swearing as well.
It only does more to bring out the passion of the poet. The stanzas and rhyming pattern needs a little re-con-structuring though; but apart from that, it's a very passionate poem. Kudos.

okay let me start off with saying i liked your poem.the way you can see and feel the anger and disgust.the choice of words;the cursing just proves it a little more.with that said i liked how it didn't matter to you,it all just came out and it's what grabbs my attention. a little reconstruction on rhythm but over all great!

Wow. This is deep. I felt the anger, the passion for anger. I don't usually review poems, but I couldn't stop myself from this one. I love it!!!! The way it rhymes and the way you brought out the anger through little words is amazing.

Keep Writing!

Nike

Ooooooh clever Must admit i had to google who it was- my excuse being that I'm Australian and i don't watch the news (neither of which are valid)....lol ANYWAY It makes me feel your anger and disgust. So well done- best thing about songs is that it can make you feel the emotion of the writer and you certainly did that so well done! I have no complaints, only a question- What genre are you going for?- Both in this song and in general? - Rachel

Anderson Cooper, eh? Personally, I'm a fan of the man, but I can see where your coming from. Imagery is powerful, and he knows exactly what to use to get the most emotional impact.

Onto the lyrics: they're raw. A good kind of raw. I can feel the anger against using violent and depressing imagery for profit.

Oh, this is just a job for you
Oh, her death was graphic
but you insisted it had to be shown
Oh, this is just your paycheck now
Oh, two years old and dead
As you crave laudation as her body's shown

I checked the date; I assume this was when he was in Somalia and showed that little girl dead in her bed? I felt that was a little too far, and kind of infuriating. I can just feel it emanating from this stanza.

Overall, great work. I can feel the emotion spilling out of this, and I'd love to hear a recording of it, if possible.

KF