I have been thinking a lot about the story and how the major problem in the first draft was that I did not have a solid grasp on Jake's character. I think one way to make him more relatable would be to change the approach towards his relationship with his niece Lily. That's going to alter a lot of scenes in the story but I feel more confident about this and spent the entire of yesterday fleshing out this idea.
“Life’s under no obligation to give us what we expect. We take what we get and are thankful it’s no worse than it is.”
Included a phone call between Eve and her Aunt in Chapter 6 because it never occurred to me that she, knowing her family perfectly well, might have some reservation about leaving her only child in their hands. Although, I am trying really hard to keep it short and not give in to the urge to expand on it since she is a character and deserves her own story.
“Life’s under no obligation to give us what we expect. We take what we get and are thankful it’s no worse than it is.”
Struggled a lot with drafting a few of the car scenes today. I feel like I need to add in a few lighter moments to alleviate the tension, if only for the sake of the child who has all my sympathies. This might also be the place to test Jake's new character arc which I have previously teased in some of his scenes with Eve and Lily.
“Life’s under no obligation to give us what we expect. We take what we get and are thankful it’s no worse than it is.”
Revised Chapters 10 and 11. Added a scene at the motel which I hope was light and wholesome, because it is definitely the calm before the impending storm.
“Life’s under no obligation to give us what we expect. We take what we get and are thankful it’s no worse than it is.”
Just struggled with the climax for entire two days only to bench it for some other day when I actually have the patience this entire section is going to require.
“Life’s under no obligation to give us what we expect. We take what we get and are thankful it’s no worse than it is.”
Since I skipped a chapter, I decided to focus on the characters instead of the plot (mostly to give myself a break and just write). I ended up having a lot of fun, even if it does unnecessarily drag the story a little. But I am going to edit it out anyways, most probably, in the 3rd or 4th draft, so I guess, it doesn't matter.
“Life’s under no obligation to give us what we expect. We take what we get and are thankful it’s no worse than it is.”
Worked on Chapter 14 today and realized how taxing it is to switch perspectives in every chapter (especially when the characters aren't all that fond of each other). I also did a little planning for the climax and decided that I still don't have a clue how the whole thing is going to pan out.
“Life’s under no obligation to give us what we expect. We take what we get and are thankful it’s no worse than it is.”
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