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Camp July '23: A Winter's Funeral (2nd Draft)



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Thu Jul 27, 2023 11:38 pm
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Liminality says...



Great job writing this week RandomTalks! You're almost there :D

Worked on Chapter 14 today and realized how taxing it is to switch perspectives in every chapter (especially when the characters aren't all that fond of each other).

That makes a lot of sense. I can imagine if you switched perspectives fewer times there would be less of a need to show each character's very different opinions/takes on the fixed set of plot events that occur?

I also did a little planning for the climax and decided that I still don't have a clue how the whole thing is going to pan out.

Ah that's relatable. The good thing about drafts is that you can always change them later!
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Fri Jul 28, 2023 8:59 pm
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Hey, RandomTalks! Just jumped in to check out your project ad wanted to say it sounds cool! Sometimes the simplest characters and plot goes a long way! I also love how you're keeping up with all the days. Nicely done! Wishing you inspiration and time to write!
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Sat Jul 29, 2023 10:27 pm
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Thank you @Liminality and @KaiaJersaga!
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You're welcome as always!
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Sun Jul 30, 2023 10:06 pm
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Day 29



Late with the update, but did not get to write much that day. Just revised chapter 14 and made some minor edits.
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Mon Jul 31, 2023 11:13 am
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day 30



I planned the ending a little and decided to tie everything up within 17 chapters. I don't want to add an epilogue since I have a sequel planned for this story but I think a conversation between the siblings in the aftermath of everything would be a good way to close this chapter of their lives.
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Mon Jul 31, 2023 9:31 pm
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day 31



Drafted the ending today but I feel like my goal isn't complete since I still haven't worked on the climax chapter. I think I need to get a firmer sense of my characters to truly understand how they would handle that scene. But its the last day of Camp, and its a miracle I even got this far considering my schedule. So I guess, I'll take what I can get!
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Mon Jul 31, 2023 10:15 pm
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Kaia says...



You did awesome! I often do a bunch of drafts for a scene like the one you were describing up there. You might find that helpful. Either way, you did great in reaching your goals and have no reason to feel bad about what you didn't accomplish. You did a lot and that's what matters!
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Mon Jul 31, 2023 10:46 pm
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Thank you for the support and the kind words, @KaiaJersaga!
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Tue Aug 01, 2023 1:48 am
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Glad to be of help! :)
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