In a small town on the outskirts of a great nation, a circus came to life.I like this, you said came to life instead of "Some random dude built a circus" This circus was split in two separate parts. One was drowning in music and lights Nice choice of words with clowns, lions, and men and women on stilts dancing through the crowd. The other half was partly hidden by the trees of a dark December forest; I like it it makes it sound creepy. no lights or music came from this tent, no merriment or laughter. Few ventured here for fear of what they might find. The freaks hid behind these curtains, staring back with empty eyes. A little girl, too curious to heed fair warning, ducked inside the blood rent (Rent or Red?) tent. There was a narrow passage before her, with cages lining the peeling gray walls (If its a tent how are there peeling walls?). The little girl yelped as her eyes fell on the creature beside her. Lying there with decaying flesh beneath her silken dress was a teenage girl. Her long brown hair curled beneath her crumbling cheek and missing eye. The little girl turned, smiling, to see behind her a terrifying thing. I think a comma would go better there Two children had been sewn into a singular two headed beast. Unlike the decaying creature, these two kept their eyes locked on the little girls every movement. Thrilled, the little girl hurried on down the path. The next cage contained a madman, laughing to himself from his place in the far corner of his cage; fidgeting in his white jacket. The girl chuckled. Watching freaks was so much fun. As her eyes fell on the next horror behind bars, she went silent. Staring back at her was a little girl.
It's my take on equality and discriminating against others.
in the far corner of his cage; fidgeting in his white jacket.
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