I think it was great. Your description is very good, and the story is interesting. I think i spotted a few typos, but it could just be me.
{rubs eyes to get rid of the sleep clouding them}
My life is a broken stair
Winding down a ruined tower
and leading no where
something I have been thinking about ever since I saw the Super Mario Bros movie is how once I took a "what Nintendo character are you" quiz and I got Waluigi. — Elinor
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