Young Writers Society

This is a really creative, albiet a bit strange, piece. The finishing statement was haunting, just how I like it. One of the kind of lines I like to read over and over again just to here its coolness and ... cleverness ... and what not ...

But really, this was good. Well done.

why did the guy die?!

this has a really cool dreamy read to it. Like random thoughts, and definitely shows the confusion of the narrator.

Part of me wants to jump and shout, ‘help! Help him!’ while the other protests, see what happens. It turns out, I follow the latter.

I think you should have "see what happens" in quotes, because I kind of got confused.

But otherwise--this was absolutely amazing. Just...amazing.

I'm here Sam!! sorry it took so long *pants from lack of oxygon* anyway this was a very good peice, very dreamy like everyone else said. But I think him seeing the gagged person happend a little to soon for me. Like something else should happen before that. And like RiaBaby said you should have "see what happens" in qoutes.

Wow, this is great! I agree with ohhewwo, the last line is great. Clever, definitely, and makes you wish there was just one more line in there. I also agree with Jack, The way you have written shows the readers confusion, and it reminds me of a character i read in a book once. Just the style of the authors, though; the randomness. Anyway, you and that author have another thing in common. You're both great.

These are so good, Sam. You should put them all in one place with little ~*~ dealywops separating them or something. It'd be cool to read them all at once...they're awesome.

I'm so lost in all these!

It is good. That ending is haunting. KEEP IT UP, BUDDY, WE'VE GOT A LONG NIGHT AHEAD OF US!

I SHALL!

AND WHY ARE WE WHISPERING?!?!

Oh, btw, a couple posts back I had a complete list of links to these things...*shrug* i get lost trying to copy it all into Word! BLAHEMA!