I thought this idea was a little cliche, but it was extremely well executed. The stream of conscienceness was very well done, and very believeable.
There was a typo at the beginning:
Jamie, get off me shoulder
Should be "my shoulder." Sorry, I'm anal.
-Sarah
"And I am a writer
writer of fiction
I am the heart that you call home
And I've written pages upon pages
Trying to rid you from my bones...
Let me go if you don't love me" ~The Decembrists "Engine Driver"
Anyone who tells me my work is cliched will have their nose bitten off. I don't care about that, and it really annoys me when people obsess about how original an idea is.
Please, sit down before you fall down.
Belloq, "Raiders of the Lost Ark"
I wasn't being negative, really. It was just a thought of mine on the piece.
"And I am a writer
writer of fiction
I am the heart that you call home
And I've written pages upon pages
Trying to rid you from my bones...
Let me go if you don't love me" ~The Decembrists "Engine Driver"
Yeah, I know. I just see young writers go on and on about whether not something is cliched or not and treat common ideas as though they were venomous snakes. I don't believe in avoiding cliches. I believe in playing with them for all they're worth and doing the best I can with whatever ideas work for what I am trying to do. All I care about is quality of execution.
But thank you for your thoughts, and for pointing out the typo.
Please, sit down before you fall down.
Belloq, "Raiders of the Lost Ark"
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