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The Sea of Grey



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Fri Aug 12, 2005 3:29 am
Boni_Bee says...



It's a very nice story, although, as everyone else has said, the word grey was used just a bit too much. It needs a bit more on the end, and the word grey-which is the theme-kind of dissapeared at the end.

You could put (at the end) 'the world didn't seem so grey any more' or something similar
  








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