Young Writers Society

ladypurple wrote:This is the result of bored writing.

With this pen I can craft.
I can construct a marvelous mountain that reaches to the sky with snow capping the peak. I can create a sparkling beach. One with white sand connecting to a crystal clear ocean. I can even piece together a made up world! One of my liking. Where music is always played from speakers floating in the air. Where the land if pink, purple, and, blue! Where the sky is green with orange clouds. A world where the water tastes like bubblegum and food is always good!
But darn it! If only this stupid writers block would go away!

If you liked it click the like button please. I had gotten stuck while re writing a chapter of my novel and came up with this in the middle of class.

TIGERSPRITE wrote:If you have writer's block, try listening to music (lyricless songs usually work for me) or going on a walk.

With this pen I can craft.
I can construct a marvelous mountain that reaches to the sky with snow capping the peak. This sentence seems to be a bit too long. Also, the "with snow capping the peak" is technically referring to the sky since that is the most recent noun that you referenced. If you shifted around the order of words or got rid of the last part completely it would make a lot more sense. I can create a sparkling beach. One with white sand connecting to a crystal clear ocean. I can even piece together a made up world! One of my liking. Where music is always played from speakers floating in the air. delete the word "always", it just adds fluff Where the land is pink, purple, and, blue! Where the sky is green with orange clouds. A world where the water tastes like bubblegum and food is always good! Try to find a more descriptive word than "good". Maybe like delicious or sweet or something like that.
But darn it! If only this stupid writers block would go away! So funny