Young Writers Society

I liked this, but it's kind of useless and all----I knew exactly where it was going after a paragraph. Maybe a poem would be better; at least it was short.

A story written by a liar? What's the fun in that?

A fun idea for a story, but I can't help feeling it needs fleshing out, if only just a little bit. The character shows promise and personality, but needs to do less talking and more showing. This is one of those delicate situations where you may have allowed your character to usurp your story-telling to a degree. I've done it myself more times than I can count, and it can be very infuriating when your character has so much to say, but no meaningful way in which to say it. Still, this story shows style and I like that! The concept is a good one for a story, if only you'll have her tell us more about the things around her; her boyfriend, her grandma, her parents, the things that make her a riot at school, and the reactions those around her actually have. It needs work. But it's definitely written well, and I think that's the important thing.

Ok hands down this was good. I feel like im not alone anymore... I MEAN uhhh I really liked it you put in a lot of work on this. it sounds really good!

This was confusing for me. But I did think this was funny. Other that, I have nothing to say. Good Luck. Keep Writing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

~Qoh16

I... don't... understand.
In all honesty, I've lived and am related to a compulsive liar. They don't act this way. But the humor did make me chuckle, I'll admit. And the end did leave me... confused. However, I don't want you to clarify anything. Leaving the reader thinking is the initial point of writing a story. I strongly approve of your story, and hope that you continue writing.

P.S. I think you're the only story I didn't sit there and point out errors; there probably were some, but I didn't see any x)

~Panda;;

Ok. I really liked this, but at the same time I found it kind of confusing. I didn't really follow it that well.

Other then that, it was a very god short story/poem.

Keep up the good work!!

-cassidyrose

Hi there.

I only have one problem with this piece,but it's a pretty major one. I can't stand the character. She or he just seems very pretentious and annoying. It's not the fact that the character was a pathalogical liar. it was that he or she tried to reason out there lying in their very annoying voice.

However this does have potential. You sometimes have cliches in your writng but that can be improved. You use of language is very good.

So keep working at it.

Haha. This is great. I loved the ending, it made it all perfect ! You could grow on this and make it into a longer story. I think it would turn out great!
Can't wait to read more. (:

This was really interesting. I liked the bluntness of this, the 'It's not an issue, it's a good thing, I promise.' It was fun to read and I plan on looking at some of your other stuff. I didn't really find anything wrong with it (unless it's already been mentioned, because if things were mentioned then I agree with them because this makes me sound more knowledgeable.) Good job!

I loved this story, it had attitude and... I don't know, it just had something that brought it to life. What you wrote was witty, and "truthful".

Keep Writing!

Nike

I liked this. It tells an interesting tale from a liar's point of view. Good job!! Keep writing!!!

I read stalking my stalker earlier today and I didn't even realize it was by you xD It was so funny.
This story is too, it makes me laugh. Great character.
Great hearing from you!

Hey there,
So I was just stalking your portfolio today. I really liked this. Your writing flowed very well; it was a very interesting idea. But I would like a few more examples of her lies. Otherwise nicely done. ^.^

Hahaha Thanks Strawberrieamie... I've never watched that movie. O.O Lol.