This made me laugh in several different spots. I loved it!
When I first read the description I was thinking, 'stream of conciousness, really?' I had to read a short story by Virginia Wolf (is that how you spell her name?) in English last year and it was a stream of conciousness piece. It took my group forever to figure out what it was. Stream of conciousness is tricky because you can't tell what's really happening and what's going on in a person's mind.
You're piece is really good. Like I said at the beginning it made me laugh, therefore brightening my day. It reminded me of something my older brother might say. He's always telling me how the aliens (or the Canadians. No offense if you're Canadian or know any) are going to take over the world. This seems like that kind of story.
Your descriptions are great and I can visualize everything you wrote. It was written well and I couldn't find any grammer or spelling mistakes.
My favorite part:
They will stream out of the oceans as one red, apocalyptic tide, scuttling into resorts and creating roadblocks on freeways.
Overall this was really, really amazing. Great job with this! Keep writing!
Noelle is the name, reviewing and writing cliffhangers is the game.
Writer of fantasy, action/adventure, and magic. Huzzah!
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Intresting take on an apoclyptic event. I would have never thought lobsters could take us over. I especialy like the message that you were trying to send with this piece. It keeps everything together. I hope to see more work like this. If I could give you one piece of advice it would be to add more detail.
Either write something worth reading, or do something worth writing. -- Benjamin Franklin
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