Why did you post this? It doesn't say anything about the story, and if it does, we don't know it because it's not connected to anything. Since this is a prologue, you should probably have posted at least some of the following writing for us to grab a hold of. The problem is, even as a prologue, it doesn't DO anything, and I'd probably recommend cutting it altogether. You don't need it.
That being said, I'm glad there's at least some character poking through in this and a hint of what's going to happen. That gives me the slightest bit to be excited about, but that's still not much.
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