Hello everyone this is a story that I made in the sixth grade and tried revising it this is an excerpt of the un-revised version and after a couple a of comments I will show the revised version.
What to do what to think. Wait! Who am I? Who are you? What am I doing here? Why are you crying? That was last month after I lost my memory. Today I'm living in my families estate in Ireland. Even though I have no idea who my family is and none of the servants will tell me not even my so called childhood friend. Oh by the way my name is Ken and I'm 17 years old. I don't really no my real last name but it's says "Smith" on my birth certificate but I traced it over the internet and found out it was fake. Last month I woke up in a hospital bed covered in blood. I was carrying an amulet and a gun. To be specific it was a Desert Eagle. My childhood friend Katie was crying over me and I had amnesia. Now here I am one month later and nothing known about me. My bodyguard is supposed to be my legal gurdian but I'm not so sure.
Well there is an excerpt please comment!!
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