Okay people...so this is my first story on TYWS...I'm nervous, I must admit, but I thought it'd be good for me. Please critique this and be honest. Thanks! (OH! And I'm sorry about the lack of breaks.)
She sat on the cold, damp rug. Wherever she was, she knew it was dark and the only light came from a small crack in the ceiling. She looked towards the light, attempting to find the source. Just the minute light hurt her head. She grumbled and put her head in her hands and rubbed her eyes a bit, but the pain did not go away. Slowly, she stood up and tried to take a step forward, but her foot did not move. She looked down and tried again, but she was too dizzy to see the problem. Her foot was chained to a rusty metal pole that appeared to be an old water pump.
She sat back down and slightly cocked her head at the sight of the metal trapping her ankle. She ran her finger along the edge of the chain. She pulled on the lock and hit the keyhole on the pump. Failing to do anything more than frighten herself more, she let go of the lock and looked around the room, or whatever it was.
What the hell is going on, she thought to herself.
The only things she could clearly see were a few boxes, what appeared to be a thermostat, a small table, a rug, and a small couch. She thought about getting up to go to the boxes and seeing what was in them, but she was scared to find out and didn’t know if the chain would allow her.
She’d seen this on television before. She saw the girls screaming and the capturers killing them for it. She had to take the risk. Through all will power, she screamed, “Help me! Please! Somebody! Anybody! Help me! My name is Alyse Smith! Help me! I don’t know where I am and I-.” Just then a tall, lanky man came down the small stairway to the place she was on the floor, holding a belt in his hands. She shuddered. He smiled and came to her, kneeled and tuned the belt in his hands. She opened her mouth to speak, but he put his finger over his lips.
“My name… well, my name,” he hesitated, “is Eric. Now Alyse, darling Alyse,” Eric said in a voice so tender, she could’ve mistaken him for her father, “don’t scream, don’t yell, and don’t try to escape. I WILL catch you. You WILL suffer.” He shook his head, eyes cast downward. He looked up, making sure to keep his head down. “Alyse, darling, don’t be frightened. I’m a nice guy.” He smiled, enjoying her pain. He took the belt and began looping it around his blue pants. He looked up at her, his bottom lip protruding. “Please believe me.” He picked up his hand to brush aside a piece of hair from Alyse’s face. She jumped back, tripping over the chain.
“Where am I?” Alyse demanded to know. She waited, but he didn’t answer. Rather, he stared at her foot. “Hello? Where am I? Please…” she said between sobs, “…tell me. I have a family. I-” He slapped her across the face, throwing her to the ground in tears.
“YOU LIAR! YOU GODDAMN LIAR! YOU THINK YOU CAN LIE TO ME? I KNOW YOU ALYSE!” Eric’s face was red with fury. Alyse buried her head in her arms and turned onto her stomach. “Tssk Tssk” He scolded. “Eat your goddamn food. I made sure the chain can reach the table. Learn to behave, and maybe it’ll come off.” With that he went back up the stairs and out the door. She heard the click. She was trapped and she knew it.
Alyse knew she had lied, she knew she had not had a family. Alyse was an orphan, both parents dead, no husband or even boyfriend, and definitely no children. She told people she was happy, but in truth, she was miserable. She would sit for hours crying and saw therapists regularly, but to no prevail. She was still depressed. She was still angry. And she was still lonely.
She saw the table at the foot of the couch, only an arms length away from her. She reached for the small plate, but her arm recoiled in pain. Slowly she stretched out again and grabbed the plate. She stared at the sandwich on the plate and took off the bread to inspect the fillings. Lettuce, tomato, ham, and cheese.
Hmmmm… Should I eat this? Alyse wondered. If it’s poison…
It was only then she realized how hungry she was. She took a small bite and began to cough and spit the piece on the floor and put the plate back on the table. The plate made a loud clank against the metal strip in the table. The door swung open and Eric stormed down. He had a tie on and one arm in his jacket. As he stormed down the stairs, his arm slipped out of the sleeve and fell to the floor.
“What the hell is going on down here?” Eric screamed at the top of his lungs. “Karissa is having a fi-“ He stopped.
“Who’s that?” Alyse asked. “Who’s Karissa?”
“NO ONE!” Eric screamed. “Damn! Damn! Damn!” And with that, Eric turned around, and walked up the stairs, violently scooping up his jacket on the way. Alyse smiled for the first time in a while. She had knowledge. She knew something she wasn’t supposed to know. That was power.
Upstairs, Alyse could hear Eric screaming at himself and throwing things. Then an unfamiliar voice caught Alyse’s attention. A break in Eric’s rambling. A woman. Could it be Karissa? Alyse thought. She couldn’t hear very well, but she heard bits and pieces.
“You did what? –Why? –You-I can’t believe! – Eric! – She’ll know - about the- THIRD- Consequences!” Alyse heard the woman say.
Then she heard something different, another voice, another man. “Are you helping us or her? This girl is not the type to make friends with! And you know that, especially not now!” He yelled loudly. Alyse knew Eric had made a mistake by mentioning Karissa.
“Shut up! She’ll hear you!” the-might-be Karissa yelled.
Alyse’s eyelids began to droop and she fought to stay awake, but was sleeping in a matter of minutes.
Alyse was woken by a sharp pain in her ribs. She went to wrap her arms around her stomach, but was kicked in the arm. No wonder She thought. Alyse sat straight up and attempted to stand. At first she tipped into the wall, but after swaying and wobbling a bit, regained her balance. Eric stared her in the face, smelling of alcohol and smoke. Just like the first guy Alyse thought. Always smoking. He was a nice guy under it all. Good old Scott.
“What the hell are you looking at?” Eric spit at her. He obviously had too much to drink. His breath was rank and he was staggering about, seemingly tripping over his own feet. Alyse looked down at his aggressive footwork. He smiled victoriously. He looked at her and Alyse saw something she had not seen in a long time; sorrow, compassion, and understanding. He is human. She thought. “What?” He laughed, seeing her holding her stomach, bent over in pain. Maybe not, She thought silently.
“I’m hurt… bad.” Alyse said in a barely audible whisper, and then added, “You know if you unchain me, I won’t try anything. I promise.” She watched him weigh the pros and cons of releasing her.
“No.” She began to argue, but he held up his hand. “Not yet.”
She accepted it, hoping that her good behavior would get her points with Eric. Maybe he’s just the middle man. Maybe he doesn’t want to do this. Alyse thought. He stared into her big green eyes with squinted brown eyes. She felt her plan was working. She wanted him to think that she felt bad for him. Inside, she wanted to slit his throat. He turned to leave.
“Wait!” Alyse yelled. He spun on his heels. “What are you going to do with me?” Her eyes began to water and before she knew it, she was in tears.
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