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Prologue: The closed window (working title) (updated a little)

Dan stood in the open, window his heart racing, wondering if he would survive the night. Many dreadful, things were pounding in his head, as he left the window his reflection caught his eye, how he hated his looks, startlingly blue eyes, white blond hair and his pale skin, an albino. As he walked away from the mirror, he realized that he was no longer alone.
" Daniel, that was your last chance to be a z-file, you know the consequence of not obeying a direct order, don't you?," Michal's high pitched voice was propelled around the stone room, making it sound like there was 100 people in the room.

hi guys (and gals) just to say thanks for reading my very short prologue and i know i need to work on my grammar

There's not much to work on, but that can be expected as it's just a prologue. But still, it's pretty short.

Sorry, but again the grammer is really bad, for example capital letters at the beginning of sentences and where to put commas and all that stuff. I don't really want to get too bogged down in all that stuf for now, but just as a tip, work on it for next time.

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thanks again for the help but i'm going to blame it all on my English classes because we never get to work on grammar.

You could always ask a teacher for extra classes/books to help or your parents.

Most grammar mistakes here could be easily spotted by the spell check on microsoft word. It's my saviour for when I'm lazy and can't be bothered checking though it myself.

thanks for the help on grammar