This is my CW piece for english coursework so I cant develop thsi section particularly, it has to stay shortish but any improvments othwr than lengthening would be great.
Also, can people please tell me where they thinks she steps to at the end?
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Nevada Falls
Moisture clings to my skin, drops washing feverishly across my forehead. On one side, there's the sheer cliff, black rock stretching upwards and outwards as far as I can see, on the other, the water pounds into a never ending void, gushing into black abyss. I know its there: the fall, the suffocation, the immense pressure of water crashing onto my fragile body, the snap of bones like dry twigs. I can imagine the grace of it, poised like an eagle, soaring into the dive.
Can't think of it. Thinking about it would make it real, and then I would fall. Right now, it's the most magical moment of my life: an image that only ever existed before in the dream-like surrealism of my wildest imaginations, but I can't escape the desperate reality of what could happen if I fall.
The cliff presses against my back. I can feel the weight of it, the sheets of ice and rock and sand that have compressed and contracted until now it's inevitable that someday they must implode.
Don't let that happen while I stand here. Don't let it happen now, please. Please. Because though I wish this vision would disappear, it's impossible to remain ignorant of the fact that I depend on it with my life. Nothing moves; only the predictable rise and fall of my chest, the sound of breathing on the edge of hyperventilating. And the intense pounding of my heart, flying as if it knows its beats are numbered and is determined to get a lifetimes blood through my system in a few short minutes. I can feel exhilaration and adrenaline coursing through me, cutting off my human senses, animal instincts taking over.
And suddenly, I want to jump. It's the thrill of the hunt: I'm an eagle waiting to dive, a cougar ready to pounce. Not a fragile teenager, hiding behind a shadow defence, waiting to die. But in reality? I'm not the predator. I'm the prey.
I've been standing here an hour or two, waiting for something to happen, for fate to notice my problem, and take care of it the easiest way possible, but I still haven't moved, haven't thought of a plan, haven't paused to consider my options or to curse whoever mapped my life out to end here. Its hell. Complete isolation, cut off from the universal connection between all things living.
There are tears down my face, shivers up my spine, thoughts through my head.
They say when you die your life flashes in front of your eyes; that you see things you didn't see the first time round, but I don't see it that way. My life is like a tree, every branch cutting off the way to a new choice, a new decision, a new road to take. And I know I've come to a dead end on this branch. I can feel it. But trees grow.
Nothing makes sense. I've come this far... I can't turn around and go back. Can I? I've worn this path of life out.
Through the shadows of the waterfall I could see vague outlines of the cliff face, a bird wings outstretched throwing itself into flight, a dark bristling pine tree, its roots driven into the rock so that it lived on the cliff face itself. Surviving, Enduring, Growing.
The ice stretches away in front of my eyes. And slowly, I step forward.
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